Persuasive....

Well I had learned that people are trying to persuade you every day, in and on everything. They do it on TV commercials trying to tell you why there product is so much better than opponents. They will also tell you what is so bad about the other people. Just like the presidential race right now, everyone wants you to pick them, but for you to want to pick one of them you need to be persuaded so they tell you things that you want to here and they also tell you things that there opponent does wrong . So in that case they are persuading you.

I also know you need to give lots of reasons in persuading, like facts. You need to back up everything that you throw at them basically. At almost as bad as it sounds put down the other opponent just a little bit just to make it seem like the thing you are persuading about is so much better than what they have

Changing my essay.

Well let's see at first I thought my paper was done really well, but after everyone has read it and after I had reread it, I was completely wrong. There were a lot of things needed to be changed, and I think I had made the changes that needed to be done. First thing I did was number each one of my pages, which I had forgotten all about. I had also changed my cited page. I never gave enough information on it, like who wrote all of those websites, and when it was last revised by the author. Also I changed around a lot of my wording in my story. after I read it a few times I found that I had a couple of sentences were run on and some just didn’t make much sense but I think I have changed most of it , the best I can to make my paper a very well written paper.

I have learned that the revision process is a must honestly. I would have never rewritten the paper the way I have unless people would have criticized it the way they did. I mean they were very inspiring about it and said it was a great story but some things just needed to be changed. So in a way I guess I owe some people thanks.

What people really think about my paper?

Well I’m really glad we had the assignment to have everyone revise three or more papers. I know this had helped me quite a bit. Everyone who had read my paper has said that it was written very well, and it had really good flow. There were some problems with it and as soon as they read it and evaluated it and let me know what they thought “I thought to myself they are completely right". I missed a lot of stuff in my story from misspellings, to missing words to punctuation. I have also messed up on not putting page numbers or making my work cited page correctly.

But in revising my own paper I will use everything, everyone has told me, because that’s what I need to do to make my paper better. I do understand what I need to do and that’s why I think my paper will be very well written when I am completely done because of everyone's help.